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i only charge $1million dollars - cash
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lol one million dollars. ill pay u in burgers. lol jk. its not that bad really posher it is just kinda like slasher i think that was what it was called about a band called slasher getting stuck in the middle of no where it was pretty good. In my opionion i would make the plot a little more interesting maybe scarier make us laugh to calm us than scare us to death it works every time. ok u might think we are all jerks for telling u what to do so u can make it into a movie and ill stand beside u because i always dream of being like stephen king. ok bye all.
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erg. i don't care if you try to help me with it... but i already no this stuff... for the last time... i wrote it for a grade, i didnt care if it was good or not, lol. i'm trying to edit it some but it feels like it should just be a movie, and not a story. but i'm bored with it anyway.
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k thats cool
that cool well good luck or whatever.
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the key to good writing is revision
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I liked it...I agree with Zero that the narrator got in the way at times, but overall it was pretty good. Keep it up!
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Hmmm, i'm thinking of starting back up on this, no major plot holes, so that's good. It needs to be buffered though.
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