Other than a few incomplete thoughts(i.e. <<
The figure came back at complete random, he never knew what day or time it would happen,>>
Complete random....what?)I thought it was a good suspense/horror story. The only question I have is was the female entity supposed to be a succubus??? Honestly, I really thought that's where you were going with that.
If you wanted to spice the story up a bit, you can make her a all out succubus. Keep up the good work! I hope you read my book when it gets published to Kindle.